Writing Tip of the Week: Your Story’s Opening Sentence

I would recommend NOT starting your story with this sentence.

You’re finally ready. You’ve crafted a detailed outline for your story with compelling plot points, dimensional characters, and a twist-filled finale. Readers will be talking about it for weeks after finishing the book. You sit down in a comfortable chair, your computer at the ready. You’ve opened a new word processing file and saved it with a file name of your story’s title and the date you’re beginning this draft. Chapter One…

“How the heck do I start this thing!?” you yell to the sky.

Writing that first sentence for any story can be a daunting task. You want to entice the reader, bring them into the story’s world, and make them curious about what type of adventure they are about to embark on. How can you craft this perfect sentence that will keep the reader reading?

Let’s talk about it!

Experiment

You know your story, what the first chapter is about, what’s happening in those initial moments when the story begins, and what characters are present. Using the information, write 5 to 15 sentences that could be used as your story’s opening sentence.

Once you have a list, pick three you like and fine-tune them so they are compelling and can grab a reader’s attention.

Then, you can…

Test It Out

Ask friends, family, or coworkers which sentence grabs their attention and makes them want to read more. Don’t tell them about the story or characters; just have them read the three sentences you crafted and see which one grabs the most attention.  

Use this information to decide what the opening sentence should be. If it’s a unanimous vote, that’s a good sign. If it’s mixed, ask people why they chose a particular sentence. Feedback is always helpful.

The Placeholder

Still stuck? Leave it for later and move on. Write the rest of chapter one, which will ignite a creative spark leading to the opening sentence. You can add something in brackets, like [Great opening sentence to go here!].  

Remember, just because you can’t develop something solid now doesn’t mean you should stop writing. Keep going, and the sentence will eventually materialize.

Start Somewhere Else

If that opening sentence is too distracting, move to a section of the story you can focus on in the meantime. Working on the story and inhabiting its world can help you find that elusive opening.

Examples

For fun, I grabbed five random fiction books from my bookshelf to read their opening sentences. I present them below. Which ones caught your attention and made you want to read more?

[I will be using the first sentence of Chapter One and not from any Prologue.]

“Half an hour after Tim Jamieson’s Delta flight was scheduled to leave Tampa for the bright lights and tall buildings of New York, it was still parked at the gate.”  

– The Institute by Stephen King

“The prophet was drowning men from Great Wyk when they came to tell him that the king was dead.” 

– A Feast for Crows (Game of Thrones, Book #4) by George R.R. Martin

“When Mr. Bilbo Baggins of Bag End announced that he would shortly be celebrating his eleventy-first birthday with a party of special magnificence, there was much talk and excitement in Hobbiton.” 

– The Fellowship of the Ring by J.R.R. Tolkein

“When I was born, the name for what I was did not exist.” 

– Circe by Madeline Miller

“I spent the last afternoon of Before constructing a 1/10,000-scale replica of the Empire State Building from boxes of adult diapers.” 

– Miss Peregrine’s Home for Peculiar Children by Ransom Riggs

Final Thoughts

Your story’s first sentence should grab the reader, but its initial absence shouldn’t keep you from writing.  By brainstorming ideas, getting feedback from others, moving on without it, or looking at examples from other authors, you can craft an opening sentence that will bring readers in and keep them engaged.

Happy Writing, and I’ll see you next time!

Writing Tip of the Week: A Simple Story Formula

What are the essential elements that make up a story?  How do we combine those elements in a simple formula that can be expanded upon?  It all comes down to a simple story formula that is also that basic of a story’s logline:

HERO + GOAL + OPPOSITION = CONFLICT = STORY

These three factors are fundamental to keeping your main character active and motivated throughout the story.  

Let’s talk about each one.

The Hero

This is your main character, your protagonist.  We will follow the person from the story’s beginning to its end.  They will go through the most CHANGE as the story progresses, following an arc that will change their perspective, change their outlook, and change them as a person by the time they get to the finish line.

We are rooting for this character to achieve what they need to accomplish, which is…

The Goal

What do they want?  Why do they want it?  What happens if they don’t get it?  

The Hero’s goal takes them on a new journey that they weren’t expecting to be on, but it is one they have no choice but to take on and hopefully complete.

The goal should cause the Hero to be ACTIVE to achieve it.  Do they need to start something?  Stop something?  Prevent something?  Run for something?  Save something or someone?  Fix something?  Destroy something?  These are all active states and goals for the Hero to move toward and accomplish.

It doesn’t mean that obstacles won’t pop up and attempt to thwart their progress as they work toward their goal.  They also have to deal with…

The Opposition

From a supervillain to a judgmental parent, the Opposition or antagonistic force exists to cause CONFLICT for the Hero throughout their journey.  The Opposition exists to do all it can to prevent the Hero from achieving what they’ve set out to do.

Most of the time, thanks to our overabundance of superhero movies, we think of Thanos, The Joker, or The Riddler as examples of clear opposition for the Hero.  But know that it doesn’t have to be a world-ending conflict that the Hero is dealing with.  It can be anyone in the main character’s life that exists to give them problems or issues that affect their journey.

Adding It Up

As stated before:

HERO + GOAL + OPPOSITION = CONFLICT = STORY

Using these elements, think about how you can plug the factors in your story into these spaces.  Do you have an active hero who is out to achieve a goal but is prevented from completing it due to opposition causing conflict for the hero?

If yes, you have the basic parameters to develop a good story.  But this is only the beginning of your story’s evolution from a basic story idea to a larger project.

Final Thoughts

This week, take some time to break down your favorite movies or novels into this formula.  You’ll find that all mainstream films and books follow this template.  

Happy Writing, and I’ll see you next time!